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Crust clings to skin, puckered edges spreading red
On elbows and knees, shouting out where you’ve been
Raised white lines across wrists indicate attempts
Salvation, damnation, maybe just blissful sleep

Fog rolls in your eyes, bees buzz in your head
You paint the world bright and colorful, sarcastically
Because all you’ve ever known was darkness
And you do like your primary colors to dream in

Walk down the street, head hung low, mumbling
Expecting nothing from the world, and getting it
Knives in your eyes and poison on your tongue
Born to be crucified; who am I to deny you?

Love does not conquer all, not the likes of us
Festering wound souls finding a moment’s solace
Before the wind howls our names again
I am you, you are me; together we are we

Briefly opening the coffin lid to daylight’s touch
You raise your head high for me, and indicate love
Clasping hands, we jump together into the maelstrom
Leaving two hearts carved on an aging tree
Chasing my muse... she may be gone for good.
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:iconfollowintheblackbird:
FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I might as well give up and just fave it all and be done with it. :)
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional Writer
Hahaha, thanks Jon! :D
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, my good friend. You have no idea how much I appreciate you sharing your work. I'm writing again and I actually got up the nerve to submit work to the Williamsport Writers Club for possible publishing in their monthly news letter. I have no idea how well "Goddess Of Wasps" and "Good Night" will be received but what's the worst that can happen, they gouge out their eyes with a claw hammer?
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. Such a wonderful poem. Very well written. Good job, sir :)
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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chryssalis Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
So strong....:heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"And you do like your primary colors to dream in" love that line ... well love the whole thing. it grabbed me and i couldn't let go until the end... and what an ending. what an ending...

muses come and go ... she'll be back ... as herself or in another incarnation, but she'll be back
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you so very much.
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:iconmishkin-rayman:
Mishkin-Rayman Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I can relate to this. In a bad way... 

I'm a bastard asshole with colorful photos. 
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
Fuck, man, that's all we all are...
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
i think you found her :heart: this is gripping.
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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Sherjaxon Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the way you end this....and the writing is very well done, but it makes me sad. I think every life is precious, even though for those whose hearts are damaged it may feel like a punishment of some sort and yet as I'm said before this is but a blink of the eye, that puts things into perspective for me.

 I appreciate you just the way you are.....a beautiful human--being. Write on!
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks so much, what a beautiful comment to wake up to!
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
not to recognize the darkness, Ron,
but to appreciate the skill with which
you depict its grasp... :hmm:

pip
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
It seems to be the only thing I can write, pip. I stared at a blank page for a week trying to write something happy and romantic for VD. (Maybe I should make that V-Day.) (snicker) Anyway, thanks!
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ha ! that is the way  i am :lol: i settle to write something bright and joyful and i end up with the despair eating desperation :lol: my best pieces are my darkests... when i write happy stuff it always ends up sappy and cliché
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
So true, mine too! :)
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ok.  write what comes to mind, and be happy with it.
allow what sun will shine to lighten you behind the
darkness.  take pleasure in our praise.

what am i saying?  i'm not sure, but hope you can
figure it out.

;) pip
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Professional Writer
Maybe I'm only happy and productive when I'm miserable? :D
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:iconwordeea:
Wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
cheers. i'll drink to that. ;p
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
in effect, Ron, that may be true:

if one succeeds in consistently portraying
one's seeming 'assigned' self image, there
may be a certain validation in that. ;)

by "assigned", i mean what one is left with
after the combined effects of one's inherited
'psychic mix' and subsequent life experience.

i suppose it does not help that no one individual
can know what it is to be in another individual's
shoes - in a true sense.  we can only think to
imagine from the basis of our own psychic mix.

by "seeming assigned", i mean that i can only
speculate from the basis of my own mix... :O

when considering that we live and react within
the scope of our own mix, i suspect that most
of the time we do not exert much, if any, free
will, and that if we do, it would generally be
only after we have learned the skill with which
to use it.

:shrug: pip
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional Writer
'Fog rolls in your eyes, bees buzz in your head
You paint the world bright and colorful, sarcastically
Because all you’ve ever known was darkness
And you do like your primary colors to dream in'

Brilliant bit of prose here
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! How are you lately?
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
I am better.  Going to get another brain scan soon and see if damage is fixed. 
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m-gosia Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
Clap Love 
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
:D :hug:
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m-gosia Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
What a cheerful little ditty! You've not lost the negative touch. 
If that's the muse, she's fully present, accounted for and counted. 
All her crushing weight and venom 
All her vile distorting vision 
All her killing gravity is here 
Locking victims to the ground 
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional Writer
Your comments are poetry in themselves. Thanks, my friend!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
I could feel the rhythm in what is now the first line, so when I added more thoughts, I just made more lines. :) Thanks.


How are you? Recovered?
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Professional Writer
I'll know more about the physical aspects when I see the doc next week. Mentally... I'm a little better, I think. Thanks for asking. :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well... your touching something here!
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks very much!
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jennystokes Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
Oh.............I hope not?
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional Writer
Me too.
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jennystokes Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Professional General Artist
No, I disagree! Heart 
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