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The spokes in the wheels turn backwards
Empty birdhouses
Windchimes
Flailing leaves
The man in the duster and battered top hat stands
with crow-pecked eyes in a cornfield
He doesn't care, it isn't his job
to sing
Only to move with the sideways winds

I wonder if he ever dreams
of the wind blowing through alleys
scattering paper on wet streets
Lamplight instead of moonlight
I wonder if he feels crucified

The creak of a front-porch swing
The mantra of the cows
Ohmmm
Pinwheels
Harvest moon
The space allotted in the north corner for two headstones
Beloved husband, beloved wife, asleep
The sleeper in the house doesn't dream
except of dark barns and shovels, and dirt
hitting coffin lids
Needs work, suggestions welcome.
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:iconlucy-singh:
Lucy-Singh Jun 28, 2013
This is actually quite good.
I wish I could write stuff like this.
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:iconbark:
Bark Jun 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much. I'm sure that you can!
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:iconearthwitch74:
Earthwitch74 Jun 6, 2013  Professional Artist
beautiful
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:iconbark:
Bark Jun 7, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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:iconcorvidae65:
Well done :clap: I like the feel of the setting and it has a Poe-esque quality to it. Beautiful and kinda creepy at the same time.
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:iconbark:
Bark Apr 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much, I appreciate that!
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:iconcorvidae65:
You're welcome :)
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:iconfollowintheblackbird:
FollowinTheBlackBird Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I agree. I can find nothing wrong with any of the rest.
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:iconhanachi-shitsukki:
Hanachi-Shitsukki Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Simply breathtaking ♥ Your poem is suprisingly musical - you bring sound to the images, dimensions to words, breathe life to the image. Keep writing.
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:iconbark:
Bark Mar 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much, I'm humbled by your compliment.
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