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2:30 AM coffee and cigarettes, rain dripping from the ledge outside
Exhausted, but hopeful; a universe in my cup waiting to spill out
I look inside; this is no new world of wonder, only the one I know
A terrain of coiled barbed wire that engraved my battle scars

Stumble once more down the dark scrubby embankment, naked
Thin-ribbed dogs of waste howl my name; they know me here
The dreamcatcher is full, there will be no more allowed inside
Knives in my back twist like an old song I’ve heard too often

Is that you, looking down from the highest places of light and love?
Do you know what it’s like to be a graveyard worm in soft soil?
How many fingers am I holding up? That’s right, I have none
Little stumps that can’t hold on to anything, can’t even make a fist
Revised 7/2/14... any better?
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RUNNrabbitRUNN Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014
brotherman i have been there....
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Bark Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Professional Writer
Too many of us have...
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorry I didn't read the original version. So much has been happening around me. I can say I like this very much.
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Bark Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks, Jon. I might still re-visit this one after I've given it some time to settle.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll keep my eyes open for it.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yes ... subtle in the 1st - and it works well...
also i forgot to say earlier : i love this verse >The dreamcatcher is full, there will be no more allowed inside
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Bark Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you! I'm going to let it ripen a while, then I'll go back and take another look. I think sometimes the best thing for a poem is just to give it enough time, then come back to it.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
absolutely !
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alapip Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yes, changes in the first stanza, i think.
i like it now; seems not so totally bleak?

faved! :)
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Bark Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks, Pip! I was trying to express how every night I sit down to write, and more often than not come up with the same old crap. There IS a universe in that coffee cup, and I mean to explore it. :)
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