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How long has it been since I left that town
Where the two-faced doublespeaking backstabbers
Keep their yards clean but thrive on filth

I'm light years away now, but still not far enough
Such a long way to go to reach the monolith
Shed this skin, become a starchild

Old dreams hang on washing lines in backyards
Curl with the dead leaves in winter
I drag mine with me to the terminal

No matter how cumbersome they become I refuse
To drop them and walk backwards
I remain in the process of Becoming
2001, echoes, and a phone call to "home".
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is one of your finest, mister. I love this poem completely and totally feel ya on every line. :nod:
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sounds like every town I've ever lived in. One learns to keep to one's self.
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Professional Writer
The city I live in now is so much better, it doesn't have that small-town mentality.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know that sort of mentality only too well. I've had to live with it way too many times.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Wow, this is fantastic... :wow:
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
:iconsun-plz::iconwelcome1plz::iconwelcome2plz::iconwelcome3plz::iconwelcome4plz:
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
poem of the week! [link] :)
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
It's an honor!
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:iconlombregrise:
lombregrise Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Professional Writer
:giggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Shed this skin, become a starchild"

"I remain in the process of Becoming "

you have such a beautiful way of seeing the world
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much!
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:iconmetal-bender:
Metal-Bender Featured By Owner May 28, 2013   Photographer
Wonderful work Ron!:D
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks very much, Peggy!
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:iconmetal-bender:
Metal-Bender Featured By Owner May 29, 2013   Photographer
You're very welcome Ron!:D
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
Old dreams on the line pretty much nails it.
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Keep 'becoming' Ron. :sun:
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks, I will endeavor to persevere. :)
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alapip Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
a well articulated cleansing, Ron,
[though the second line may be a
bit over the top]. ;)

know that you're not alone in having
injustice in the past. there are a lot
of us. personally, i had a period of
eleven years of good fortune in my
30s, and thus focusing on that, the
present is quite livable.

the future is that-away-->

:)pip
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Not even close to over the top. :)
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Meaning it's under the top and entirely true. I see this stuff every day.
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i dunno. it just read as one long word too many,
but i still faved it. :nod:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Ah, so your objection was poetic. I see. :)
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
both that and the third
multi-syllabic word in
a row seemed screed-y.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
But you coulda had pretty much the same sonic effect by>

Where the two-faced
doublespeaking
backstabbers

Maybe with even slightly more 'punch'.
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alapip Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
whatever Ron prefers, actually...

[you trapped me into bothering again]:hmm:
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Bark Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Yeah, this came up after talking to my sister on the phone yesterday. I've managed to put it behind me for the most part. I love the city and it's people where I am now.
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alapip Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, i suppose it's past time to
phone my sister too.

being retired now, i may return to
Nashua NH, where the good years i
mentioned were lived... but i may
not bother to visit again where
home didn't feel like home.

:shrug:pip
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
It hasn't been nearly long enough since you left, and it probably never will be. I live with a neighbor who is so weak, so insecure, so full of fear and hate, that she must control everyone around her, and prove to herself several times a day that she is in control and safe. Her house and yard are neat and clean, but her mind and words and actions are poison of the filthiest kind. Life is a terrible burden to her and to all who share in it even a little. She pretends to be strong and independent and proclaims it loudly, but it is all a house of cards, and false. Claiming that everything, which is actually paid for by others, belongs to her. Any disturbance of the fantasy is grounds for attack. Perhaps you lived in that old town with pathetic humans such as this, who need comforting that they make impossible to give.
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Bark Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Yeah, I grew up in a small town. I didn't realize how warped it was until I finally got out. One things for sure, I'll never go back.
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jennystokes Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
That first verse!!!!!!!!!!
So true.
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Bark Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional Writer
:nod: Thanks, Jenny!
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jennystokes Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
This was what it was like when we lived for "2YEARS" in New Jersey......................!!!!!!!!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Only 2 years; you were lucky. :)
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jennystokes Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
Ha!
The minute we arrived there we knew we had made a big mistake!
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
I lived there for two years, but I was a baby; I didn't know about anything.
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jennystokes Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
Good...............very conservative people.
Some had never been to NY??????
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:iconlancelotprice:
LancelotPrice Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Well.... I can understand not wanting to go to New York. ;)
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lombregrise Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional Writer
'Old dreams hang on washing lines in backyards
Curl with the dead leaves in winter'

great lines
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Bark Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much!
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