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You ask me how I am; I’m fine, I’m fine
My toes have fallen off from walking barefoot in the snow
But I didn’t need them anyway, I’m okay
It’s you I’m worried about, grey –faced and dull-eyed
What’s going on, old friend?  You’ve lost weight
Your step is slower, your shoulders stooped, are you in pain?
I see you’ve lost your toes as well
Let us walk together then; daylight will come in time
Fees unfinished... I may tinker with it some more.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I sort of got lost in this one.
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:iconbark:
Bark Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional Writer
Good! I've done my job, then.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes you most definitely have. :D
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All-My-Darkness Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Toes in the snow.

What an image.

I'd say sew them back on but that image
is just as haunting as yours.
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Bark Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Professional Writer
Sewn-on toes... that is some striking imagery!
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All-My-Darkness Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Somehow even sadder..

Like trying so fucking hard to keep walking even when...yeah..then.
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facetspera Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This piece's meaning to me is denial in the face of the inevitable, right until the bitter end. Maybe that's not what you intended, I couldn't know. All I know is I liked it.

Thanks for the opportunity to read your work.
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you so much for reading. You're very insightful.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love all the imagery and color it brings to mind although the topic is rather sad. Its beautiful. Well done :)
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
oh my. this reads like a folktale. it's beautiful :heart:
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
There is a lot I liked about this poem,  the voice and the idea particularly. I believe  some fat could be trimmed or reworded but overall this has a good feel. I enjoyed what isn't said and how it conjures up mental images for me. Thanks for posting, Bark.
White light,
Sorry
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much!
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Sssorry Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
:)
White light,
Sorry
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
I suppose you could use a microwave next time to finish the word-cooking, if you go in for that sort of shallow, quickie-tech approach. And I do! :D
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
I usually just say I'll get back to it and never do.... :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Me, too.
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m-gosia Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
Let us walk together then; daylight will come in time......Heart 
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
:D pretty positive stuff for one who lives in darkness, huh?
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m-gosia Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Nod Heart Heart Heart 
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
strong...
i see whay you feel it is unfinished ... i feel like i would like to know more about that friend, that friendship
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
I passed an old man trying to walk through the snow with a cane; he seemed like he might fall over at any time. That's what brought this on.
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh.... even moreso, the meeting of two strangers, walking together for a while ..
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is very strong.
...one thought; at the end the last line, is the "its" necessary?
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks, man, that pesky li'l critter is gone! :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love this thing.
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jennystokes Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional General Artist
Spring is coming????????????
Hugs
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Yeah, only two months 'til the first baseball game. :D
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jennystokes Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional General Artist
Girls play that here with no padding!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Rounders.
Heart 
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014  Professional Writer
:D
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RichardLeach Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014   Traditional Artist
Good stuff, Ron.
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks, Richard.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Interesting read...
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
You are welcome... :aww:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
10 more minutes in the oven, and
maybe another sprinkle of salt -
not sure... but it smells pretty good. :nod:
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
haha, thanks, pip. I'll look at it with a fresh eye tomorrow. :)
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
actually, it already deserves a fav... :nod:
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Well bless your heart! Thanks :)
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33M Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014

I rarely comment on lit but do have to tell you that I adore this....

 

M

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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you so much!
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x-pyre12 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014
:D....nice feel!
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Bark Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks, Robert! :)
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x-pyre12 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
A pleasure, Ron!
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